Deep_Level_Shark Posted May 19, 2013 Share Posted May 19, 2013 I'm trying to write an english sentence better way. Here is the sentence: He died at his residence on 10-Feb-2011 naturally. Is this a correct english ? what I tried to mean is that the person had a natural death on that date.how do I write a better english here ? can you please correct it ? what are other possibilities here in wrting ? Need help. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Marshall Veteran Posted May 19, 2013 Veteran Share Posted May 19, 2013 He died in 2011, on the 10th of February of natural causes. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Evil Overlord Posted May 19, 2013 Share Posted May 19, 2013 He passed away 10th February 2011, I believe it was natural causes. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
hackdoom Posted May 19, 2013 Share Posted May 19, 2013 He passed away on the 10th of February, in 2011, of natural causes. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Deep_Level_Shark Posted May 19, 2013 Author Share Posted May 19, 2013 Here is so far I have written this paragraph...I am not sure if this can be written in a better way. I have known Mr.X at address Flat-2,City-Y,Dist-Z,Pin-K for the last 6 yrs with good physical & mental health to my knowledge. He passed away on the 10th of February, in 2011, of natural causes. Can I write at address ? Is it correct ? I am not sure....can you please correct it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gerowen Posted May 19, 2013 Share Posted May 19, 2013 It doesn't look too bad. You could just change the word "naturally" to "of natural causes", so that it reads, "He died at his residence on 10-Feb-2011 of natural causes.". Using just the word "naturally" I don't believe is technically improper, but the term used most commonly nowadays when referring to a natural death is "of natural causes". Deep_Level_Shark 1 Share Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Deep_Level_Shark Posted May 19, 2013 Author Share Posted May 19, 2013 Please look at post #5 Do you see any scope of improvement of wrting the paragraph in better way ? also ...at address is correct ? or I need to write it some other way ? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
+Xinok Subscriber² Posted May 19, 2013 Subscriber² Share Posted May 19, 2013 (edited) This is how I would write it, though it may be different depending on your location as well as your reason for the writing (letter, article, essay): He passed away from natural causes at his residence on February 10, 2011. For professional or formal writing, avoid abbreviations such as Feb or yrs. I'd say there's technically nothing wrong with the way you wrote it; it's merely a matter of convention which is something you learn with time. I have known Mr. X, whom resided at the address Flat-2, City-Y, Dist-Z, Pin-K, for for the last six years and has always appeared in good physical and mental health. You should always have a space after punctuation, including in "Mr. X" and the comma-separated list. As well, the bit, "to my knowledge," is implied from the context so I feel it's unnecessary. Edited May 19, 2013 by Xinok Deep_Level_Shark 1 Share Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Deep_Level_Shark Posted May 19, 2013 Author Share Posted May 19, 2013 This is how I would write it, though it may be different depending on your location as well as your reason for the writing (letter, article, essay): He passed away from natural causes at his residence on February 10, 2011. For professional or formal writing, avoid abbreviations such as Feb or yrs. I'd say there's technically nothing wrong with the way you wrote it; it's merely a matter of convention which is something you learn with time. I have known Mr. X, whom resided at the address Flat-2, City-Y, Dist-Z, Pin-K, for for the last six years and has always appeared in good physical and mental health. You should always have a space after punctuation, including in "Mr. X" and the comma-separated list. As well, the bit, "to my knowledge," is implied from the context so I feel it's unnecessary. Thanks Mr Xinok, I guess you had a typo here .. I have known Mr. X, whom resided at .... should have been .... I have known Mr. X, who resided at .... is not it ? Can you please confirm ? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PNWDweller Posted May 19, 2013 Share Posted May 19, 2013 Out of curiosity, why state the address? This is not relevant unless you are writing a legal report or other documentation which requires such data. This might help with your who vs whom question: http://www.prdaily.com/Main/Articles/Who_vs_whom_A_simple_trick_for_determining_when_to_8964.aspx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jakem1 Posted May 19, 2013 Share Posted May 19, 2013 He passed away 10th February 2011, I believe it was natural causes. :rolleyes: This is a pathetic euphemism, not correct English. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nick H. Supervisor Posted May 19, 2013 Supervisor Share Posted May 19, 2013 Thanks Mr Xinok,I guess you had a typo here .. Nope, "whom" would be correct I believe. I can never get it right, myself, but here is the rule Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Barney T. Administrators Posted May 19, 2013 Administrators Share Posted May 19, 2013 :rolleyes: This is a pathetic euphemism, not correct English. It is accepted and is correct English, except it is better to say that he died. The Evil Overlord 1 Share Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jakem1 Posted May 19, 2013 Share Posted May 19, 2013 Nope, "whom" would be correct I believe. I can never get it right, myself, but here is the rule Who is correct, not whom. Who relates to he/she and whom relates to them. If you were to rewrite the sentence accordingly you would say: have known Mr. X. He resided at .... Either way, the original sentence is a bit awkward. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nick H. Supervisor Posted May 19, 2013 Supervisor Share Posted May 19, 2013 Who is correct, not whom. Told you I could never get it right. :laugh: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jakem1 Posted May 19, 2013 Share Posted May 19, 2013 It is accepted and is correct English, except it is better to say that he died. Agreed. Sorry, I didn't mean that "passed away" isn't correct English. I meant that it's not more correct than "died" and shouldn't automatically be used as a replacement in the way that Dushmany suggested. Told you I could never get it right. :laugh: :) It is difficult and I think that's why whom is falling out of favour and is rarely used these days. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
+Xinok Subscriber² Posted May 19, 2013 Subscriber² Share Posted May 19, 2013 Who is correct, not whom. Who relates to he/she and whom relates to them. If you were to rewrite the sentence accordingly you would say: have known Mr. X. He resided at .... I was trying too hard. :p I know whom to be the objective form of who but haven't quite figured out what that means yet. While I write well, I don't have a good understanding of what makes one form correct or what makes one form better than another. In the end, I simply write whatever sounds good to me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Evil Overlord Posted May 19, 2013 Share Posted May 19, 2013 :rolleyes: This is a pathetic euphemism, not correct English. Ok, how would you have said it, using just the information I had before the OP added to it? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jakem1 Posted May 19, 2013 Share Posted May 19, 2013 Ok, how would you have said it, using just the information I had before the OP added to it? Probably the way Marshall said it right before you posted: He died in 2011, on the 10th of February of natural causes. No offence but I can't stand it when people replace died with "passed away". It's an unnecessary Americanism that's creeping into the language for no good reason other than to sugar-coat an unpleasant but normal part of life. It's also a particularly meaningless euphemism given that you don't go anywhere (and certainly don't pass anything) when you die. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Evil Overlord Posted May 19, 2013 Share Posted May 19, 2013 ~snip~ 'passed away' is an american term??I remember it being used on british newsreels back in the late '50's Although I'm only 37 I remember them being shown on a documentary about the BBC vs ITV Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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