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I've been assigned an assignment where I have to write a "hakiu" poem with "5 / 7 5" syllabells.

Here is the rough layout I've done so far,

Perfection Before Me,

Senstations Exploding Within,

Wishing Chance.

I'd rather if you don't have something helpful or nice to say that you please don't post in this thread.

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How about..

Perfection Upon,

Senstations Exploding Wild,

Wishing Chance Now.

I don't know about that "Now" at the end if anyone has any recommendations.

Thanks ThreeTone.

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How about..

I don't know about that "Now" at the end if anyone has any recommendations.

Thanks ThreeTone.

sensations, not senstations, and now is only one syllable, your last line still needs one more.

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It's meant to be talking about a girl that is in front of me.. Then I'm feeling a rush of emtions and wishing for a chance with her.

Let me know if you got that. :ninja:

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It's meant to be talking about a girl that is in front of me.. Then I'm feeling a rush of emtions and wishing for a chance with her.

Let me know if you got that. :ninja:

Yeah we got that :rolleyes:

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5-7-5 eh?

This Is Pretty Gay,

Why restrict the amount of,

Syllables you use?

or

I Hate Poetry,

It's The Worst Thing In The World,

It Honestly Sucks.

:rolleyes:

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It's meant to be talking about a girl that is in front of me.. Then I'm feeling a rush of emtions and wishing for a chance with her.

Let me know if you got that. :ninja:

Sigh.

RPM that part of your post is gonna bring people onto you like a pack of wolves, and so far this threads been ok.

Then you wonder why people do it.... yer gonna realize someday man.... :wacko:

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5-7-5 eh?

This Is Pretty Gay,

Why restrict the amount of,

Syllables you use?

or

I Hate Poetry,

It's The Worst Thing In The World,

It Honestly Sucks.

:rolleyes:

HAHA!

nice one.

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Bro!?

HOMER, I am just wondering if people understood the direction of the poem and that's fine if you yourself didn't because the girls in the class that reviewed my paper (laura, carolyin, megan) like it!

Anyone else care to give constructive comments?

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If you're writing to impress someone, you will never be good. I write poems (I am not a poet cause I do it only for myself) and unless you just pour your soul into what you are writing, it wil lnever be truely amazing. I'm not saying my stuff is good or amazing, just I can't even bother reading someone else's work unless I know they put everything into it.

Back on topic:

If you're going for haiku, you are way off on the syllable count.

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Okay.. How's this.

:happy:

I personally think this summarizes a little bit better what you have in your head- all the words that you have used except one, just put together a little bit differently:

Perfection in front,

Sensation Exploding Free,

Wishing for a chance.

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Um, say the word and count each syllable as you say it? You do speak English right (being from Virginia and all)? :)

If you want a real way to do it, the dictionary is what you need: Dictionary

Look up the word "sensation" - you will see that in the definition the word is shown as sen.sa.tion - those are the syllables. Sensation has 3 (sen, sa, and tion).

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Nice! Hrm :huh: is their a computer site I can use to check hakiu poems to make sure they have the correct syl.?

just use your fingers. I do that alot.

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5-7-5 eh?

This Is Pretty Gay,

Why restrict the amount of,

Syllables you use?

or

I Hate Poetry,

It's The Worst Thing In The World,

It Honestly Sucks.

:rolleyes:

Godo one dud... (Y) :yes:

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the three keys which are used to

end hanging programs

haikus are fun. You almost never see single haikus, usually they are strung together to make longer poems, each one being a single stanza, or thought.

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