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Question, how can the below sentences be improved to better integrate the quotes?

1:

Gene can be frequently seen expressing free association details in text with, ?his back muscles working like a panther? (762) and with, ?preceding the others like two seigneurs? (763), both personifying actions.

2:

Instead of referencing the nearest object resemblance, Demetrius uses tone in, ?and the ill counsel of a desert place? (II, I, 252), rather than using desert as an exaggerated adjective.

Thanks in advance.

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Gene can be frequently seen expressing free association details in text with, ?his back muscles working like a panther? (762) and with, ?preceding the others like two seigneurs? (763), both personifying actions.

2:

Instead of referencing the nearest object resemblance, Demetrius uses tone in, ?and the ill counsel of a desert place? (II, I, 252), rather than using desert as an exaggerated adjective.

Thanks in advance.

Examples of Gene using free association to illustrate details in the text include, "his back muscles working like a panther", and "preceding the others like two seigneurs," both of which personify action.

and I'm not quite sure what you're trying to say in the second line, but:

Demetrius refers to, "the ill counsel of a desert place" using the adjective desert for tone rather than as an exaggerated adjective.

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