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A stupid question.. But my english isnt very good so could someone quickly read through a short english homework and correct me if I have some misstakes? Am I allowed to post this?

Extrem Snowboards AB is a Swedish company based in ?re, J?mtland County. The company originated 23 years ago by a group of average teenagers who designed snowboards in there garage. They noticed quickly that there was an interest for there products and decided to start manufacture them for the public. The company started to grow and today the company owns one store and a factory with a total of ten employees all year round.

What really makes Extrem unique is that they still, after 23 years still make there products by hand. They have a special design as are now well known for there quality and high performance products. There products doesn?t stop at snowboards, they sell skis and clothing as well. They spend the summer designing next year?s models, and now they recently started to sell bikes and accessories in the summer to keep the company busy all year round.

Thanks for the:)elp :)

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Extrem Snowboards AB, is a Swedish company based in ?re, J?mtland County. The company first originated 23 years ago by a group of teenagers who designed snowboards in their garage. They quickly noticed that there was an interest for there products and decided to manufacture them to the public. The company grew, and today the company owns a store and a factory with a total of ten employees all year round. What really makes Extrem unique is that after 23 years they still make their products by hand. They have a special design and are known well for their quality and high performance. Their products do not stop at snowboards, they sell skis and clothing as well. They spend the summer designing models for next year and have recently started to sell bikes and accessories in the summer to keep the company busy all year round.

edit: I edited this. Make sure you have the correct one

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thank you.. Shouldnt "... interest for there products..." also be changed to "... interest for their products..."

As you notcied I have trouble when it comes to there and their. Also I tend to make misstakes when it comes to where and were...

Thanks again :)

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Here is what i came up with. Im not a native english speaker though....

Extrem Snowboards AB is a Swedish company located in ?re, J?mtland County. The company was founded 23 years ago by a group of average teenagers who designed snowboards in their garage. They noticed quickly that there was a high interest in their products and therefore started to manufacture them for the public market. The company started to grow and today the company owns one store and a factory with a total of ten employees.

What really makes Extrem unique is that their products are still handmade. They have a distinctive innovative design and are now well known for their quality and high performance products. As the company grew they expanded their product line and sold not only snowbaords but skis and clothing as well. They now spend the whole summer designing next year?s models, and recently started to sell bikes and accessories in the summer to keep the company busy all year round.

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thank you.. Shouldnt "... interest for there products..." also be changed to "... interest for their products..."

As you notcied I have trouble when it comes to there and their. Also I tend to make misstakes when it comes to where and were...

Thanks again :)

Yes i missed that.

Their refers to someones possesion "Their toys"

There refers to distance "over there" "go there"

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thanks so much for your help. I did a combination of your changes. Though I still have one sentence I need to change, "..They have a special design as are now well.." I want to change "special design" to something more advanced... I did like EvErSoR's suggestion but it sounds a bit to advanced for me (my teacher will see that I didnt write that)..

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They have a special design and are known well for their quality and high performance.

Through high performance, quality, and unique design, Extreme's sets themselves apart from the competition

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I did like EvErSoR's suggestion but it sounds a bit to advanced for me (my teacher will see that I didnt write that)..

Well, a friend reworded your writing. Your teacher cannot give you any **** for that. You still wrote it. Even novel writers have editors.

Just like if you reword someone elses work, its still plaugerism

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yes I know but since I still get grades and I have a sh*t teacher who is very strickt when it comes to this kind of stuff I dont want to take a chance :/

Thanks again :D If I hadnt changed there to their my grade would have gone out the window...

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Extrem Snowboards AB is a Swedish company based in ?re, J?mtland County. The company first originated 23 years ago by a group of teenagers who designed snowboards in their garage. They noticed quickly that there was an interest in their products and therefore started to manufacture them for the public market. The company started to grow and today the company owns one store and a factory with a total of ten employees all year round.

What really makes Extrem unique is that they after twenty three years they still make their products by hand. They have a special design and are known well for their quality and high performance. Through high performance, quality and unique design, Extrem sets themselves apart from the competition.

As the company grew they expanded their product line and sold not only snowboards but skis and clothing as well. They now spend the whole summer designing next year?s models, and recently started to sell bikes and accessories in the summer to keep the company busy all year round.

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Extrem Snowboards AB is a Swedish company based in ?re, J?mtland County. The company first originatetwenty-threeb> years ago by a group of teenagers who designed snowboards in their garage. Thequickly noticedb> that there was an interest in their products and therefore started to manufacture them for the public market. The company started to grow and today owns one store and a factory with a total of ten employees all year round.

What really makes Extrem unique is that they after twenty-three years they still make their products by hand. [DELETED SENTENCE]. Through high performance, quality and unique design, Extrem sets themselves apart from the competition.

As the company grew thehaveb> expanded their product line and sold not only snowboards but skis and clothing as well. They now spend the whole summer designing next year?s models, and recently started to sell bikes and accessories in the summer to keep the company busy all year round.

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okej homework.prefinal.v4 here we go :p

Extrem Snowboards AB is a Swedish company based in ?re, J?mtland County. The company first originated twenty-three years ago by a group of teenagers who designed snowboards in their garage. They quickly noticed that there was an interest in their products and therefore started to manufacture them for the public market. The company started to grow and today the company owns one store and a factory with a total of ten employees all year round.

What really makes Extrem unique is that they after twenty-three years they still make their products by hand. Through high performance, quality and unique design, Extrem sets themselves apart from the competition.

As the company grew they have expanded their product line and sold not only snowboards but skis and clothing as well. They now spend the whole summer designing next year?s models, and recently started to sell bikes and accessories in the summer to keep the company busy all year round.

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Extrem Snowboards AB is a Swedish company based in ?re, J?mtland County. The company first originated twenty-three years ago by a group of teenagers who designed snowboards in their garage. They quickly noticed that there was an interest in their products and therefore started to manufacture them for the public market. The company started to grow and todadeleted wordsb> owns one store and a factory with a total of ten employees all year round.

What really makes Extrem unique is thaDELETE "THEY"b>after twenty-three years they still make their products by hand. Through high performance, quality and unique design, Extrem sets themselves apart from the competition.

As the company grew they have expanded their product linby not only selling snowboardsb> but skis and clothing as well. They now spend the whole summer designing next year?s models, and recently started to sell bikes and accessories in the summer to keep the company busy all year round.

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okej homework.pregold :p (I am going to start making release names for all my school work :p)

Extrem Snowboards AB is a Swedish company based in ?re, J?mtland County. The company first originated twenty-three years ago by a group of teenagers who designed snowboards in their garage. They quickly noticed that there was an interest in their products and therefore started to manufacture them for the public market. The company started to grow and today owns one store and a factory with a total of ten employees all year round.

What really makes Extrem unique is that after twenty-three years they still make their products by hand. Through high performance, quality and unique design, Extrem sets themselves apart from the competition.

As the company grew they have expanded their product line selling not only snowboards but skis and clothing as well. They now spend the whole summer designing next year?s models, and recently started to sell bikes and accessories in the summer to keep the company busy all year round.

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